Faulty Comparisons

Incomparable terms

Do not compare items that are incomparable.

Wrong: The girls of Manhattan are far sexier than Brooklyn.
(We do not want to compare girls with a borough)

Right: The girls of Manhattan are far sexier than those in the Bronx.

(Now we are comparing one group of girls with a pronoun—“those”—representing another group of girls).

Make sure the meaning is complete:

Wrong: I love French fries more than you.
Right: I love French fries more than I love you.

Or: I love French fries more than you love crystal meth.
french-fries.jpg

Fix:
1. The number of abandoned children in Queens is higher than the rest of the city.

2. Britney gave me more than Kevin.

3. Mini cream-filled bon bons thrill me as much as bums who suck crack pipes in the basements of abandoned buildings.

Incomplete comparisons

Wrong: Donna kissed me better than Karen.

Right: Donna kissed me better than Karen did

Right: Donna kissed me better than she kissed Karen

Fix:

1. Bobo is smarter.

2. Dr. Jackson is richer.

3. Our love for cheating on each other is as great as the big coconut layer cake shimmering with eat-me whiteness on the top shelf of our Sub-zero refrigerator.

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